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Take a look at me and tell me how you feel;
For love greater then the sun;
should take more time to steal;
But, heavy heart leads the way;
For me to wait and hear you say;
"I'm sorry for the things I've spoke;
For your heart deserves the most;
But, I love you more then I will ever show;
I just wanted you to know".
©2007-2009 ~artsychic27
:iconartsychic27:

Author's Comments

the human heart is a funny thing.
just remember.
its not there to amuse you, kids.

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:iconlooper55:
Awesome!! :buymyprints:

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I Live My Life A Quarter Of A Mile At A Time.
:iconvelociraptor842:
I like it!! It's so sweet, and sad, and makes me want to hug someone, or cuddle alone in a corner. My only issue is that the semicolons after every line are a bit distracting. I suppose they could be artistic, but they just make it kinda more difficult to read. Also, in other grammar related comments, one generally would not put a comma after the word "but." Then again, it's just so hard to say, because it is, after all, poetry, and in poetry, the rules of grammar no longer really apply, do they? =)

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"There is always some madness in love. But there is also always some reason in madness." -Friedrich Nietzche

"When we were good, you just closed your eyes. So when we are bad, we'll scar your mind." -MM

HUGS CURE EVERYTHING. :hug:
:iconbat-in-black:
hehe cute. me likes it;P :heart:<---=fragile

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~today is tomorrow as yesterday is today~

----i DO NOT give up because i cannot QUIT----
:icontarneshedheat:
I like it chrissi, though i agree with raptor that the semicolons are somewhat a distraction, and actually rather unessesary to have. Aside from that it's quite a nice poem, very heartfelt and very straight to the point. good work

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JAKE.D
:yakuza:

My dog found himself today
leash in hand he walked away.
He's barking out obscenities,
cause he had lost your sanity-------Fifth Season/Social Code
:iconartsychic27:
haha. i wouldnt know. im horrable at grammer and spelling.
as you can well tell.
but, thanks for the advice.

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*The Pencil is Mightier then the Sword because no matter what anyones says it still hurts to get stabbed with a Pencil!*
:iconartsychic27:
thanks hun<3

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*The Pencil is Mightier then the Sword because no matter what anyones says it still hurts to get stabbed with a Pencil!*
:icontuki-monopoly-giant:
:hug:

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The present never lasts, the future never comes.
:iconlost-lemming:
\m/ woot \m/

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I'll never be free, So I'll meet a few of them in hell.

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